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Feedback: I would like to know if the idea of including the Don't Ask Don't Tell issue in my project even makes sense (because Don't Ask Don't Tell is gone, non-existant). I want to make it a story that begins in the time of Don't Ask Don't Tell and ends with the election. It's supposed to (and will now that I can get out of bed) include Obama's views on Gay marriage and his plans for legalization of it. I still need to screen shot and include tweets. My main issue with my project (as is) is that the series of letters I'm using to tell the story have to be written out by hand and then taken a picture of. Does my use of characters telling their story through "letters" work as a repetend? Is the storyline too far-fetched to be believable? Also, does anyone have any suggestions on how to change the layout of my project? I'm not happy with it.
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Alivia Royds
23/10/2012 12:04:20 am
I really like how you tied a story into this and made up two characters. That was a great idea and made it all stand out. You have some really great screen shots and pictures and ideas here and I don't think its too jumbled or bland at all. I think it looks great and I don't have any ideas of anything to add because i don't want it to take away from the point your trying to make. Great job!
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Katrina
23/10/2012 12:04:25 am
I like that you used an email, very interesting! I like that you did screen shots, makes it feel personal. The picture speaks volumes as well as the Pinterest boards. I was thinking maybe you could find a video to add to it or maybe use a recipe to add more modes to your project but it was very creative overall.
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Sarah
23/10/2012 12:04:44 am
I really loved all your genres - they were really unique and I wouldn't of thought of creating fake emails and taking screen shots of them. That was really awesome and I love that you focused your story on two characters. Really well done - I think maybe the only thing you need to do is maybe add some type of video/audio and that would really add to your project. Well done :]
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Christina
23/10/2012 12:05:09 am
I absolutely love your e-mails as letters, and the focus on "Don't Ask, Don't Tell." Ah! I also love that you brought your character to life by making HIM create the pintrest board.
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Jenn
23/10/2012 12:05:12 am
I love this!!! I wouldn't change anything that you have now, the only thing I would do is add a couple more genres or a video. I love all of the screen shots, especially the Pinterest boards and the emails. PERFECT ideas! Great job :)
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Kerri Price
23/10/2012 12:05:12 am
I love it. You said you were concerned about organization, but it flows nicely as it is and was easy to understand! I enjoyed your use of a repetend to keep your reader going. Your characters were well developed and helped to drive your story on. I'm not sure I would change anything!
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Amanda
23/10/2012 12:05:22 am
I liked the approach of your project. I like that you made a main focus character a soldier. I also like how you incorporated emails instead of just a letter. It shows the modern era we live in now. I like your magazine cover too. Don't put yourself down I think you did a good job. Maybe adding some kind of sound or video would help make your project a little more moving.
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Ashley N
23/10/2012 12:05:23 am
I think your project was good. I could see what exactly your topic was and your opinions about it. I think maybe you should start off with a magazine cover or a video. The genres you used were all and I liked the short story and the picture that follows it.
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23/10/2012 12:05:30 am
You are too hard on yourself haha. That was definitely an interesting project, not bland at all. The genres were original and the writing was well done. The formatting was simple and effective and everything looked very streamlined and nice.
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Nicole H
23/10/2012 12:05:32 am
I loved the emails back and forth to tell a story. I really enjoyed your project! I loved the pinterest boards as well. You got your point across and I think you did a really good job!
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Prof. Mangini
23/10/2012 12:05:55 am
One suggestion for making it more organized is to create a new sub-page for each genre and you could put a button on each page to lead you to another one this would serve as a repetend as well). See Jaclyn's as an example... but great job. Love the screenshots.
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Janine
23/10/2012 12:07:42 am
Your project is really good! I like how you added in fake emails and a blog post. You are telling a story throughout your project, which I think works really well. It is very creative and organized!
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Jaclyn H.
23/10/2012 12:09:07 am
The way you made it the screenshots makes your project a lot better than just putting it on the page. I like how the whole story is tied together and about the two men.
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